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10 March 2012 @ 01:41 pm
Haiku While We Wait, Now WIth Bonus Limericks!  
Since Ohana Favorites voting doesn't start until next Sunday, let's use the time until then writing Hawaii 5-0 Haiku!!!

Why? Why Haiku?

Why not? I love Haiku. I suck at writing them but that doesn't matter! (And I think Chin would find it really Zen, don't you?)

What is Haiku? Here you go (stolen shamelessly from here.


The Japanese haiku and the English language haiku have several critical differences. In Japanese the haiku is composed of 17 sound units divided into three parts - one with 5 units, one with 7 units and another with 5 units . Since sound units are much shorter than English syllables, it has been found that following the Japanese example results in a much longer poem. The Japanese write their haiku in one line. In English, however, each part is given a line in order to clearly divide the parts of the haiku. This allows the reader time to form an image in the mind before the eyes go back to the left margin for more words. The line breaks also act as a type of punctuation.

The kigo, or season word, is a vital part of the Japanese haiku, but in English it is often ignored and not well understood. Therefore, a great number of English haiku do not have a season word and yet are considered to be haiku. The Japanese, because of their longer history of reading haiku, understand that there are two parts to the poem. In English these are called the phrase and fragment. One line is the fragment and the other two lines combine grammatically to become the phrase. Without this combining the two lines together the haiku will sound ‘choppy’ as the voice drops at the end of each line.


If we get "enough" entries, the other mods and I will award a prize for the best H50 Haiku. Of course, I haven't actually told them we're doing this, or asked them if they agree. Ah well.

(If I did this right, the comments shouldn't be screened so we can all enjoy the fruits of our labor.)

Only 2 rules:
  1. They have to be related to Hawaii 5-0 in some way.
  2. They should follow the customary 5-7-5 format.
On your mark. Get set. GO HAIKU!!!

Sure, post your limericks here too. I'm open to it! Do I need to find an "official" definition? 'Cause I got nothing!



 
 
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a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve-lyinghaldoor on March 10th, 2012 10:52 pm (UTC)
God, I love Haiku. (and limericks too - we should do them some time!)

Here's mine:

Leaving the water
Steve's body glistens wetly
Danny's eyes linger
Are 6 dogs too many?: my danno heartstkeylasunset on March 10th, 2012 11:01 pm (UTC)
Oh fabulous!!!!!
(no subject) - haldoor on March 10th, 2012 11:06 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - rocsfan on March 10th, 2012 11:14 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - haldoor on March 10th, 2012 11:21 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - tkeylasunset on March 10th, 2012 11:35 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - haldoor on March 11th, 2012 12:48 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - rocsfan on March 11th, 2012 02:33 am (UTC) (Expand)
Are 6 dogs too many?: Kono happytkeylasunset on March 10th, 2012 11:49 pm (UTC)
Okay, Since I Started It
The wave comes for her.
The one that is perfection.
"Catch your own, haole!"
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-ohana awardshaldoor on March 11th, 2012 12:43 am (UTC)
Re: Okay, Since I Started It
Brilliant!
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 12:03 am (UTC)
I always loved writing haiku at school. Here's my first attempt:

Stoic, silent Chin,
Mirror lake above, so calm;
Volcano beneath.
Are 6 dogs too many?: chin ho armoredtkeylasunset on March 11th, 2012 12:06 am (UTC)
Fabulous!
(no subject) - haldoor on March 11th, 2012 12:44 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - rocsfan on March 11th, 2012 02:34 am (UTC) (Expand)
--♫ Anna--: Kono Windowrocsfan on March 11th, 2012 02:37 am (UTC)
The murderer flees.
Ka-boom goes the loaded gun;
Kono hits her mark.
Are 6 dogs too many?: Kono and Gracetkeylasunset on March 11th, 2012 04:48 am (UTC)
Go Kono Go Kono!!!

Thank you!! Wonderful!!!!
(no subject) - haldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:54 pm (UTC) (Expand)
decynthus: Dannodecynthus on March 11th, 2012 04:42 am (UTC)
"Steven, shut your face"
"Oh, seriously, Danno?"
Cargument again
Are 6 dogs too many?: Group Hugtkeylasunset on March 11th, 2012 04:48 am (UTC)
This is why I love Haiku. So few words. So much said!

Thank you!!! Fabulous!!
(no subject) - haldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:55 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - fatorangekat on March 12th, 2012 12:57 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - decynthus on March 12th, 2012 03:37 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - rocsfan on March 16th, 2012 02:07 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - decynthus on March 16th, 2012 03:56 am (UTC) (Expand)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 09:19 am (UTC)
Words fired like bullets
An apology tendered
Acceptance pending.
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve-inigohaldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:55 pm (UTC)
Another excellent one!
(no subject) - deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 08:03 pm (UTC) (Expand)
But what if I'm a mermaid?: Queen of Wands - readdeepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 09:30 am (UTC)
Warning: sexual content

Cath sails into port
Checks all her sex toys are packed;
Steve awaits on shore.

Or, since I couldn't resist, a more explicit version:

Cath sails into port
Checks all her sex toys are packed;
Steve awaits, pre-lubed.
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve-lyinghaldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:56 pm (UTC)
HA! I like the second one best! ;-)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 09:44 am (UTC)
Danno loves Gracie:
A truth so universal
You'd see it from space
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-all the boyshaldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:57 pm (UTC)
Nice - you do these so well. ;-)
But what if I'm a mermaid?: Queen of Wands - readdeepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 10:13 am (UTC)
Warning: sexual content

Steve swims, strong and sleek
On shore, Danny palms his cock;
Watching gets him hard.


...and I think I'll quit before I degenerate into writing actual haiku porn. Unless there's a demand for that, of course!
Are 6 dogs too many?: Max squeetkeylasunset on March 11th, 2012 02:08 pm (UTC)
Consider this said "demand." Please. These are Fabulous!!! Seriously!

Please, may we have more?
(no subject) - deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 08:02 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - haldoor on March 11th, 2012 05:58 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 08:02 pm (UTC) (Expand)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 08:43 pm (UTC)
Golden ink-stained skin
Danny's always yearned to touch;
Brave, he reaches out.



Ahahaha, true story: I originally had 'wanted' in the second line, and it was only on a final recount - I count syllables on my fingers, to be sure - that I realised it had two syllables and not one. This is funny because Danny and Steve had an argument about that word's number of syllables in a fic I wrote!
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-smittenhaldoor on March 13th, 2012 09:45 am (UTC)
oooh, this one's wonderful too; you have a real talent.

Ha! Love the story behind the word too! ;-)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 11th, 2012 08:55 pm (UTC)
Warning: sexual content


Lung capacity
Expanded by SEAL training,
Steve sucks like a pro.
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve-lyinghaldoor on March 13th, 2012 09:45 am (UTC)
HAHAHA! Awesome. ;-)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 12th, 2012 09:42 am (UTC)
Warning: sexual content


Danny rides Steve's cock
Head thrown back, gasping for air
Steve just holds on tight.
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve-coolhaldoor on March 13th, 2012 09:46 am (UTC)
Seriously, I'm considering hiring you next time I need Haiku porn. ;-P
(no subject) - deepbluemermaid on March 13th, 2012 10:05 am (UTC) (Expand)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 12th, 2012 09:43 am (UTC)
Good things come in small
Packages; Danny is the
Perfect example.
a geek in such the wrong way: H50-steve&dannyhaldoor on March 13th, 2012 09:46 am (UTC)
Nice! You totally have this form down. I bow down to you.
(no subject) - rocsfan on March 16th, 2012 02:10 am (UTC) (Expand)
But what if I'm a mermaid?deepbluemermaid on March 12th, 2012 09:46 am (UTC)
Probably my last one, unless someone else takes up the challenge and posts more:

Kono rides waves like
She was born with fins, not legs;
Grace just stares in awe.
a geek in such the wrong way: misc-nz flaghaldoor on March 13th, 2012 09:48 am (UTC)
And another brilliant one to end. And I'm heading for more of your fic next, although not tonight considering how late it is.

Also, would you mind if I friended you? I'm a fellow Kiwi and somewhat in awe of your writing skills. ;-)
(no subject) - deepbluemermaid on March 13th, 2012 10:09 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - haldoor on March 13th, 2012 05:44 pm (UTC) (Expand)
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